This is first of 4 short stories that will make up my fiction book. It's about zombies yeah i know what a childish thing to write about. but I am still a child.. (well in my head anyhows ) If you have spare time or just clouded out its 20 pages long in pdf, so go ahead and enjoy, its the first copy and will be edited over and over till its perfect.
cheers
tony
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Sorry to say this but i have been reading the first bit and i have found many mistakes in grammar
100 million men, women, and child. (children)
“The weapon will be launched within in the hour doctor, the orders have been through” (Take the in out).
There are many more mistakes and it makes reading at times difficult
I am not criticising your work but when writing a book, the grammar has to be right .
Sorry to say this but i have been reading the first bit and i have found many mistakes in grammar
100 million men, women, and child. (children)
“The weapon will be launched within in the hour doctor, the orders have been through” (Take the in out).
There are many more mistakes and it makes reading at times difficult
I am not criticising your work but when writing a book, the grammar has to be right .
Aha, you couldnt be more right. its the first draft, im just happy to get it finished i need to check over it over and over again mill before i start the next one
Aha, you couldnt be more right. its the first draft, im just happy to get it finished i need to check over it over and over again mill before i start the next one
Only check your own work twice and then get it checked by someone else.
Other people look at it in a different way
yeah i know what a childish thing to write about. 
but I am still a child.. (well in my head anyhows 
) If you have spare time or just clouded out 
its 20 pages long in pdf, so go ahead and enjoy, its the first copy and will be edited over and over till its perfect. 
